Peer Review WA2 - Melvin

After I read Melvin's writing assignment 1, I found that it is quite logical and organized to me as I understand what he is trying to express in the essay. After reading the introduction paragraph, it gives me a rough idea on the background of nuclear power reactors and he chose very-high-temperature reactor to argue. From paragraph 1 to paragraph 2 there is no transition used. In this case, there is no direct link between the two paragraphs. As for paragraph 2, I think there is necessary to rephrase the sentences again and the structure is not in correctly done. In paragraph 4, there is no solid evidence to support the main idea thus the argument is not so strong. Overall, there are few grammar mistakes which need to be changed and some of the referencing is not properly done. This writing assignment is much better than the first writing assignment. Good Work!

Summary on "A force to fight global warming"

There is an increasing of awareness on how important natural ecosystem is in order to reduce global warming effect. Actually, the cost of preserving natural ecosystem is much lesser compared to losses of ecosystem that bring to us. People save natural ecosystem and in return, it provides livelihood and save people when natural disaster occurs. Maintain, restore and not destroy natural ecosystem is the easiest and safest way to save it. If it is destroyed, people will gain nothing from it and in fact, it will deteriorate the environment and harm people.

In the past, climate change is treated as an individual problem for nature and people but this is no longer so as this is a problem for both and an integrated approach is used to fight against global warming.

In conclusion, the integrated approach is to conserve biodiversity in order to slow down climate change, reduce global warming and raise the adaption of ecosystem and people simultaneously. People protect nature and consequently, it saves lives and sustains livelihood.

Peer Review - Melvin's WA1

After I read Melvin's writing assignment 1, i found that it is generally logical, well organized and smooth flowing to me as I understand what he is trying to express in the essay. I found the essay is quite interesting because it shows some statistic about the contribution of nature to us and how climate change affect us. Such as "oceans alone able to absorb about 2 gigatonnes of carbon a year, and reducing deforestation and forest degradation able to cut carbon emission up to 1 gigatonne a year”. After reading the introduction paragraph, it gives me a rough idea that the essay is going to discuss about the ways to fight current global warming using integrated approach from both nature and people. The two main arguments in this essay is how natural ecosystem saves life and sustain livelihood and hidden benefits that nature has to offer for people without destroying it.From each paragraph, it does give a quite clear idea and provide some supporting sentences and the statistic that he used also support his idea on that paragraph. For the conclusion, he emphasized the idea of the essay which make it more clear. Only the citation of the essay is not properly done and no references in included in the essay. Thus, it might be quite difficult for me if I want to find out more information on this topic.

INTRODUCTION

Hello, Everybody!

My name is Yanto. I am from Indonesia. In year 2005, I came to Singapore to further my study. I took the O' Level examination as a private candidate and successfully entered Singapore Polytechnic. I chose Marine Engineering because at the very beginning I would like to become a marine engineer and experience sailing life. Be a marine engineer has many benefits, for example the salary is high and it is tax-free, can travel around the world and can work with other people around the world. Although the benefits are good but there is always a risk. In the end, I never go for sailing but decide to work ashore. So, I continue my study in NUS.
Currently, I am pursuing my Degree in Mechanical Engineering. Through this EG1471 module, I hope to learn more in writing skill, reading skill and communication skill.

This is my first post about myself and I will post more on the blog. I hope everyone whoever read my blog can point out my mistakes and give me your valuable comments, so that I can learn from my mistakes.

Thank you very much..